Jefffy
Number of posts : 4 Registration date : 2009-01-27 Age : 31
| Subject: Sanity Mon May 04, 2009 4:17 pm | |
| A name on the wind A lost memory playing through his broken mind Barely recognizable in the growing darkness
“Rose”
He can almost see her face, Almost feel the warmth of her hand in his Almost remember the sound of her voice in his ear
She turns to him And suddenly, he’s cured He’s normal
These are the times that keep her there That keep her hoping But it’s all at a loss
For quicker even than they arrived Reminding him of himself, his history, the world around him, The memories leave him, taking more and more of his sanity as they go
Forever he’s lost Saddened by the look in her eyes Angered because he can’t remember how to help her
“Rose”
He tries to wipe the tears from her cheek Tries to comfort her But he can’t remember how
Rage bottles up in the instant before his skin meets hers And it’s released as they touch An unkind act of violence
He draws his hand away Fury swelling in his eyes by his fault Ashamed that he can’t hold on to what was once his
And he flees in fear In hatred In sorrow
“Rose”
She stands Not even bothering to feel the swell near her eye Not even paying note to the blood rushing out of the gash on her cheek
“He was better” She whispers And, for a moment, she’s right But only for a moment
They tell her to leave him Her friends They tell her that she’ll get hurt
But as skies turn grey she always returns to his call Because she can still see it The progress he’s not making
And as she watches from afar (No matter how close she actually is) He slips further away from the sanity she knows he once had
All he remembers is held in her And so he clings to her like a magic charm Relying on her faith in him to pull through
If only it worked If only he could hold back the frustration the comes when the memories fade If only things had never gone wrong in the first place
“Rose”
A name in the wind An incomprehensible word that means so much to him If only he could remember why | |
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Jefffy
Number of posts : 4 Registration date : 2009-01-27 Age : 31
| Subject: Re: Sanity Mon May 04, 2009 4:18 pm | |
| I'm wondering what you guys think. There's still a few things I want to change, but I'm not sure what they are yet. ^^; | |
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Ryue Admin
Number of posts : 166 Registration date : 2009-01-19
| Subject: Re: Sanity Mon May 04, 2009 5:26 pm | |
| Wow, that's wonderful.
I'm not all that great at poetry, so I wouldn't know how to help you, but I think it's an awesome poem. | |
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Jefffy
Number of posts : 4 Registration date : 2009-01-27 Age : 31
| Subject: Re: Sanity Mon May 04, 2009 6:07 pm | |
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Dudesgotagun
Number of posts : 17 Registration date : 2009-06-19
| Subject: Wow Tue Nov 09, 2010 8:54 pm | |
| Super, and I mean duper for realsies. Breathtaking. | |
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